Show not tell. My horrible room

WALT show not tell in writing .

As i walked in oh wow i forget what color my floor is it smells like dead fish, it looks like a horse's been in my room, the air tastes like dirty muddy water, I can hear flies buzzing around ,I can feel dirt and sharp rocks. Clothes everywhere.

Swimming

                    Swimming

Getting ready to jump feeling scared and  happy think I

will lose I can see other contestants They are going good

I'm not sure about this I think in my head  I here people

cheering my name And I jump I can taste the chlorine I

can feel smooth water How do you smell fish and chips

from next door it makes me hungry.

By Rylee